Editing for clarity

Thu 16 Sep 2010 - Filed under: Not a Journal., | 1 Comment | Posted by: Gavin

David Moles and 100s of others point out that there are crazy people on the internets trying to tell everyone else that this country is only for people like them. Er. Wrong. David and a few others also mention that pointing this stuff out is important. I generally am not very good at speaking out when the batshitedness raises its head, but thought perhaps I should start. I was especially sad to see that the 521 comments (thus far) were deleted. Pronouncements: apparently ok! Conversations: Not so much!

So here is part of Ms. Moon’s post, edited for clarity:

I do not dispute that there are moderate, even liberal, [PEOPLE UNLIKE ME], that many [PEOPLE UNLIKE ME] have all the virtues of civilized persons and are admirable in all those ways.  I am totally, 100%, appalled at those who want to burn the [HOLY BOOK UNLIKE MY HOLY BOOK] (which, by the way, I have read in [MY LANGUAGE, NOT YOURS, OK] translation, with the same attention I’ve given to other holy books) or throw paint on [HOLY BUILDINGS THAT I DON’T WANT IN MY NEIGHBORHOOD] or beat up [PEOPLE UNLIKE ME].  But [PEOPLE UNLIKE ME] fail to recognize how much [SHIT I’VE HAD TO PUT UP WITH FROM PEOPLE UNLIKE ME] forbearance they’ve had.

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One Response to “Editing for clarity”

  1. Will Shetterly on September 19th, 2010 1:25 pm

    Well done. I suspect you’ve done a little editing in your time.

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